Thursday, June 18, 2009

Friday 6/19/09 - "THE BOX - STEP 3

(fear has sewn her lips together)

(fear has dissolved)


FLASH FICTION FRIDAY 55
Friday Flash 55 is a story
written in exactly 55 words.
Let the G-Man know if you write one
and read the ones of your fellow writers.



"THE BOX - STEP 3"

Fear that has sewn her lips together so long is dissolved.

She asks, "What's your name?" The counselor says, "Cindy. Tell me about yourself."

Darlene decides to trust and says, "After eight years of marriage, I can now admit my husband's over attentiveness at the beginning of our marriage has progressed into constant abuse and "

Prayer Girl

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Note: The following was LAST WEEK's
"55 Flash Fiction Friday":

THE BOX - STEPS 1 & 2

This voice she hears sounds so caring, loving, inviting, and at the same time, strong. It reminds her of Lucy.

She'll be able to speak. Hesitantly she replies, "I'm Darlene".

In the speaking of just those two words she realizes she will be able to ask for help and she believes things will change.

Somehow.....

18 comments:

steveroni said...

Picture #1
What a way to diet!

Picture #2
"You know how to whistle, dontcha?"

(Husband is a "Rat's ASS".)

Peace,
S

Zanejabbers said...

That first picture hurts my lips.

clean and crazy said...

this is very freeing, don't like the first picture though, hit a little too close to home. but i always love your work.

Tall Kay said...

Great twixt of the Steps in there. I hope we can look forward to going all the way to Step 12! Very well done!

Shadow said...

dissolved fear. what a relief.

Hootin Anni said...

you tease us...and each installment is worth the wait.

Happy 55ing.

Just Be Real said...

Very powerful visually and in words PG.

Blessings.

Dr.John said...

You are doing such a good job of catching the feelings of a battered woman.That first step is the hardest.
I remember several woman from my parish that I was sure were being abused that I couldn't talk into taking that first step. In one case Her Doctor and I together tried but failed. She killed herself.

Lou said...

The first picture was creepy! But that is probably what abuse feels like.

Wait. What? said...

Oh man great photos to go with the story! Thank goodness she was freed from fear - I really enjoy your 55 stories linked in this way!

LA Nickers said...

Great idea - to make these a series!


Here's my Flash-55:

PLAYING HOUSE – THE FATHER OF THE BRIDE

Melli said...

Ohhh I'm glad her fear is melting! You did a wonderful job with this...

Fandango said...

You humans are so hard to understand.
You are always doing things that hurt yourselves.
Well written 55 might help some.

Unknown said...

Wow, so powerful and the pictures only made it more so, thank you PG, amazing indeed!

Susan at Stony River said...

Wow; what a step for Darlene, what a powerful moment to capture in so few words!

But the top picture, I cringed! Tell me those are drawn on! LOL

g-man said...

I'd like to sew some peoples lips together...hehehe...

Thanks for playing, and have a GREAT Week-End...G

Syd said...

Ouch in so many ways. I hope that Darlene has some peace.

Carol said...

There is a place in my life right now where we suspect that the cloying attentions of a husband are actually part of an abusive situation. It is scary stuff up close.