Thursday, August 20, 2009

Friday 8/21/09 - "THE LAST DRUNK"



FLASH FICTION FRIDAY 55

"THE LAST DRUNK"

Sober three months that July 4th, she could repeat, but didn't understand "don't be in slippery places with slippery people".

She on the dark island with drinkers, fireworks ended, boat broken, sitting alone on a cooler of beer.

A mental blank place, she stood, turned, opened the cooler, drank the first of her last drunk.

Prayer Girl


Flash Fiction Friday 55
is a story written in exactly 55 words.
Let the G-Man know if you write one
and read the ones of your fellow writers.

17 comments:

G-Man said...

I know thats the way it goes too PG.
What a powerful 55 My Dear.
Thank you so much for this beauty!
Please have a Wonderful Week-End.
Galen

Cat said...

Oh PG, I think this happens more than I would care to know about, so hard is addiction.., brilliant 55!

Cindy said...

Super powerful, and cautionary. Thank you.

wolfie185 said...

My mind thinks about if she knew it was going to be here last would she have ended the relationship in this manner. I know my last night of drinking wasn't the way I would have planned it had I of known I wasn't going to caress my demonic lover again, well again as in up to today. You did a beautiful job in describe something so powerful in 55.
Thanks

Tall Kay said...

Very pain filled 55. It really does tell an entire story. Sounds like experience to me :)

anthonynorth said...

It happens so easily - unless there's an iron will around.
Great words.

Shadow said...

i remember this from your story...

Lou said...

An island with beer is a bad place to be when trying to get sober! But you came to your senses soon after..good one, PG.

Just Be Real said...

Very nice PG, thank you.

Hootin' Anni said...

Excellent. I'm not one being troubled by addictions, but I have lived with them, so I know just what temptations and difficulties this is to those who are. Excellent.

My 55 is posted here. Have a super weekend. See you next week, I hope.

Gin said...

The first beer of the last drunk. AMAZING PG! Truly amazing 55!

Dr.John said...

BUt then one stays sober one day at a time. One day at a time.
Great 55.
One can not play with fire and not get burned.

My 55 is posted
HERE.

ciara said...

very powerful 55, pg.

Mama Zen said...

Perfect.

Mona said...

That was sad. I wish she will have more will power next time!

Syd said...

I'm always mystified at how the HP shows up to say it's enough. It's time to stop. Really powerful.

♥ Boomer ♥ said...

Fantastic. Very powerful.