Friday, April 10, 2009

Saturday, 4/11/09 - "THE BOX"

every Friday, compose a short story of 55 words - no more, no less. if you want to join in the fun and games and give it a your story and report to the boss


Her eyes furtively slip to the small writing table. They dart from silver notebook to blue pen to pink cell phone. Her trembling, ambivalent hand reaches out and retracts.

If she calls, he'll contact the lawyer and win again. If she doesn't, she's the victim again and he wins.

Trapped in a box of fear.

Prayer Girl


Anonymous said...

Oooh! I had to read this one a few times. Very well written, PG.

clean and crazy said...

leaves me wanting more, is this to be continued?

Prayer Girl said...

I actually thought about titling my Flash Fiction 55 "The Box" Part I, but didn't.

Maybe I will do a Part II.

Steve E. said...


Mommie, will the man saw the box and the lady in half?
Where is the man on the phone?
What is ambivalent?
Are all lawyers bad people?
Why is the lady afraid?
Mommie why are you driving so fast?

Mona said...

Some situations can really be horribly Catch22 !

Akannie said...

Nice, very nice.

I love your poetry.

Shadow said...

nicely done. talk about that horrid catch 22...

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

I always love reading your writing, Thank God for you and his work through you!

Lou said...

That was a taste of "blog-noir!"

Syd said...

I've been in a box of fear and it's not good.

G-Man said...

Prayer Girl...
Very nicely done!!!
Thank You so much for joining the 55 funfest!!
Yours was of of the best contributions this week.
Please try and remember to play again.
Have a Happy Easter....Galen

Lulda Casadaga said...

Damn dilemmas...:) Nice job!