Sunday, October 10, 2010

Monday 10/11/10 - "COMING OR GOING?" - Micro-Fiction Monday




MICRO-FICTION MONDAY



"COMING OR GOING?"

She held all she owned in 3 small bags as she looked at the train.
Was she going or coming?
She'd forgotten, didn't know.
She needed help.


(140)


Prayer Girl

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35 comments:

EG Wow said...

A bag lady or soon-to-be bag lady, I fear.

Brian Miller said...

running away aint going to help much either...

Peggy said...

Awe, poor thing. How freightened she must be.
Good take on the picture, she does look confused even from behind!

Sylvia K said...

Oh, darn! I do know that feeling!! Super one for the day! Hope you have a great week!

Sylvia

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh, now that's really scary. My parents both had Alzheimer's before they died, and every time I forget something (several times a day, or several times an hour, I forget which) I think "uh-oh"!
Am also thinking I could get to enjoy Microfiction.

Kay, Alberta

Michael G-G said...

She sure does need help! I'm rooting for her.

Have a great week, OPG.

G-Man said...

Great Job PG!!!
Loved it....G

Strummed Words said...

Hope she figures it out little by little!

Everyday Goddess said...

I do hope she finds herself and hasn't lost her spirit.

Jim said...

Oh, P.G! I'm laughing XD!
The reason is not that the poor lady is funny but that in my first story I had the train leaving (going) but really it is coming. So I wrote the one you read. ;)

There are a lot of people in the world like your lady. I am on my way. I do hope someone will take care of my stuff so that I don't have to have only what I can carry with me. :)

I am probably about 50% dyslectic but have never been diagnosed as such.
..

moondustwriter said...

Also reminds me of Alzheimers where there is such uncertainty
Great take on that prompt


Moon smiles for your week

Syd said...

I wonder if she has lost her memory. I hope someone helps her.

Pat said...

The way my memory is going, I'll be like her in 20 years! :(

Poignant. Well done.

gospelwriter said...

She needs help alright, poor thing - hope she finds it... Nice MM!

Deborah said...

Aaw...captures it well, well done!

Ellie said...

So sad. I hope someone comes to her rescue. A great take on the picture.

Have a wonderful week x

Greyscale Territory said...

This poor soul seems homeless! Sadly, this is the case of too many in our civilised world! Powerful little micro!

Diane said...

Oh no, poor, confused thing! :O(

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Sounds as if the Poor Dear shouldn't be out on her own, I wonder if they know she is missing.

5thsister said...

Poor thing wondered away! Many years ago I found a man, who appeared confused, outside of a discount store. He begged me to help me find his way home. This was in the days before cell phones. My heart broke because I recognized he had dementia. So I put him in the car and drove up and down the nearby neighborhoods. As I was about to give up and call the police, we found his daughter. I hope this poor demented soul finds her way home as well.

Ninotaziz said...

Sad. Hopefully, there is someone looking out for her.

Incidently, mahjung, bridge and card games are said to help.

My grandmother who gave me stories is in critical condition. I don't think I will be able to write for awhile.

Ms.Daisy said...

Awww! I feel like that a lot lately! lol! :) Good MM - lots to work out in this one!




~Jean

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

OH such a vivid scene...

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Very sad, to be so confused and alone. Unfortunately, not an unlikely scenario. Good job.

Stephanie said...

I like it...it says so much in so few words.

hope said...

In that case, she'll be happy as long as she finds out where she is. :)

septembermom said...

What a scary thought for her as she boards.

Pblacksaw said...

sadly there are many people who this is true for.. I liked it..
Patsy

Jim Swindle said...

I like the story. It reminds me of train rides and bus rides...including the bus driver who was annoyed at me when the bus started rolling and I pointed out that my checked bag was sitting on the curb. He doubted that I saw the right bag...but mine was the only one with plaid sides and a black-and-yellow striped top! He stopped and loaded my bag.

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

aww. better not to travel alone at this stage. good MM.

Lenore said...

well done...makes me want to know more!

Akelamalu said...

I hope it's not the onset of something horrible for her. :(

Sioux Roslawski said...

How horrible to be that disoriented, that confused.

quilly said...

Traveling can make you that tired! I can't tell you how many times I feared sleeping because I might miss my stop. Good take.

(Sorry I am late, life complications!)

lizziviggi said...

Poor lady. I'd help her!